Ok, listening as i'm writing i kinda lost interest there somewhere around 30-40seconds, i feelt something "new" needed to happen, a little arpeggio melody in the bakground maybe? The wah guitar(or whatever it is) that comes in later sounds nice, but couldn't it play some more strokes, sorta jimi hendrix "wah wah:ish"? That would probably sound even better!. The melodies feels fine to me, and your a good singer, the best i have heard on this forum so far!
The drumsounds i think is the weakest part of this track, they sound a little...i don't know, a little strange, are they reverbed or something?
The kickdrum needs to be more "present", if the sample sounds "like that" you could try a transient designer/shaper to get some more out of the kickdrum.
Well that's all i could think about now!
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Thanks so much for taking the time to listen guys, and for your really valuable feedback. It's so helpful to have an objective opinion having listened to it so many times myself. I will take a look at this tonight, you are so right about the drums! Mack