I really like your stuff. Let me know if you'd like some lyrics and/or vocals doing sometime, male or female.

Thought I was finished with this one a while back, but recently got a Realistic Moog MG-1 and it turned out to be the missing element!

Hope someone here enjoys:

https://goldendeathmusic.bandcamp.co...deadly-weather

If anyone is interested, the drums are Addictive Drums 2, the Rhodes is from Addictive Keys, and everything else is a real instrument (electric guitar, clarinet, and a Moog MG-1). DAW is Reaper and interface is a Tascam UH-7000.

Great track, like your style. I can't imagine that track without the Moog, so I'd say it was the missing element! Good stuff.

Thanks so much, Mr. Funk! Yeah, it's really simple but I love this little keyboard. Good for all kinds of stuff.

This is music about amazing girl

https://soundcloud.com/pumping-ace/r...ds-wonder-girl

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=cj4f74h_jmI

Little, but still sell for quite a sum!

Here's a track I finished yesterday, thoughts?

If it were my track, I'd add a little more punch to the drums.

Wow, My Sh** just got totally ignored. I guess I should go elsewhere.

I'd say the lyrics are fine for the genre. I don't mean to be ingenuous to the genre etc, but simple, cliche lyrics seem pretty standard. It's almost prefered as they are easy to remember when singing along on the dance floor or in the car etc.

However, there is no reason you couldn't write new, deeper lyrics or simply alter the ones you have with just a few more unexpected rhymes here and there?

Any tips on how to do so? Compression? I'm using Addictive Drums 2 which already have the drums kind of pre-mixed, but I usually add some mild compression and tape saturation (magnetic) on top.

I'd tastefully compress and maybe use a touch of saturation on the snare and then play with a transient shaper if needed.

In context of your song it's fine I think, it's quite an eccentric pop track you got there hah. I don't really like the word cliche itself to be honest though, just has an ugly sound (k-sh) for something that's used as a chorus IMHO.

Thanks for your input. I can see "Cliche' rubbing on someone's nerves if they keep hearing it. It's one of those "crispy" words lol

Thanks for the input. Maybe I'll try playing around with the lyrics and see if anything more substantial comes to mind.

I like the track. If it was me, I'd going into the chorus a little harder. Just before the chorus, I'd make it seem like there's a pause so there's a bit of anticipation.

Yeah, when I'm not in love with the lyrics I've written for a song, I tend to just pick out the bits that bother me the most and just replace those bits and that usually does enough to make them acceptable.

One thing I try to avoid when writing lyrics are things that will date the song. So in stead of trying to be "modern" and saying "I sent you a tweet" I would simply say "I sent you a message", as we will always send messages in some form but sending Tweets may seem "so 2017" in a few years, if you know what i mean. Same with slang, I tend to use words that are established and although are not the "latest thing the kids are saying", they are still words the kids will accept, like "cool" for instance.

That's great advice! I have another song where the singer/ghostwriter did well but she was a bit too predictable and repetitive for me. I don't have a problem with either in this case it sounds a little too robotic even though its' an emotional track. I'm tempted to use a formant plugin on it and make it sound like a Future Bass" vocal since that's all about repetition. Also, if this was the chorus, it would be cool too, but it's not. It's sort of the pivotal part of the song as far as the vocals go and leaves me with the feeling of, "That's all?"

Thanks. It makes me happy

Yeah maybe you're right, cheers :-)

re "A Dogs Flea".... Hey guys any chance of some feedback here? Vocal I used a u87 double tracked and yeah its a bit loose but I reckon it fits the genre. I guess the genre is blues in particular something you might have heard in 50s Chicago? Piano, drums and vocal. Piano is the Stienway patch outta Logic and the drums are the Logic studio heavy played on keyboard. Feel like flaming? Flame away as long as its constructive. 40 years playing covers I can take it but it's time to throw my hat in the ring with some originals. Cheers from down under.https://youtu.be/S1jrA8yksEI

I was stopping by to post something I just finished but I'm glad I ran into this tune instead. I like it....it's real and raw and rollicking.

And then there's this odd lament about writer's block......

https://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=13624163

Sounds cool!

I would have drums come in much sooner and would also add rhythm guitar and bass guitar parts (and maybe one or two more parts) to fill up the backing a bit.

How did you record the strings?

Sounds very good!

How was bass recorded and mixed?

This is balanced, eq'd and drizzled with a lot of too much of everything. But would appreciate feedback before I really eff 'er up with my automation passes. Any and all commentary is welcome. FOREWARNING - naughty, explicit word involved at beginning. Many thanks in advance.
Wheels

I don't see anything "odd" about it, unless you mean the voices effect in the beginning, which worked well. Really nice, very bright clean sound. I may be looking you up for tips on gear/mixing.

Very nice, Unclenny. Yours always are good; sure like the way you let the guitar ring and decay at the end. So...you hear voices too? We thought so! haha

Very nice Unclenny, I really like it! Actually I really like alot of your songs that I've heard on here.
Also the mix sounds great to me.

Been a long time. A snippet again. I find there's something wrong with the vocals in some parts... can't pinpoint it. Any advice appreciated. Thanks!
https://youtu.be/7hbJsEsH4xQ