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Old 23rd May 2020
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Originally Posted by Mr Funk View Post
The song is now longer. Longer intro (wanted to try it). Also small break between first chorus and second verse now. I added horns, have they improved the track? Have they hurt it at all?

Still want to do something with chorus to make it more distinct. and I will try 1 or 2 bmp slower when I record vocals for real. I will also get a guitar or sax solo for the end break section, but I'm leaning towards guitar as it's less cheesy.

https://soundcloud.com/kanewilliams-.../s-7BxkIgbcdQ5
Hi Kane, hope all is well with you.
Thanks for posting.
Very briefly: I think it starts out very busy so it is hard to develop, hence the vocal can't really grab the listener. I think the easiest way to explain it is if you listen at the beginning and then listen at the end. Has the listener had a journey or had it been the same road for the duration?

Just my $0.02.