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Old 14th September 2015
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Originally Posted by PTCruiser1801 View Post
Any feedback is very much appreciated!

'Time Won't Slow Down':

Not listened yet, but read the lyrics and like them a lot. I would only make one small change if you can find an appropriate phrase, and that is repeating of the word old in the line "mind is weak it's growing old". There are plenty of words that rhyme with old that I'm sure a suitable line could be constructed.

It's not a deal breaker and I'm not while heartily against using the same word to rhyme but my preference us not too if possible or unless nothing else conveys the meaning as much.

I will take a listen soon as the lyrics are great. My sympathy for your family also.