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IdiotStick 10th November 2015 08:50 PM

Escape the Fate - For Critique
 
This was written a few weeks ago and I am working on the music now. Would appreciate any feedback. I hear this as heavy rock a la Motley Crue.

Thanks in advance! Fire Away!


Escape the Fate
Unpublished Work, Copyright © R. Dobbins

Verse 1:
Nothing’s easy, nothing’s free
It’s all been stolen by the president’s men
Lost for nothing, let’s agree
They’ve taken everything that’s ever been

Verse 2:
Got no money, got no home
I’ve just been riding on an endless high
Won’t be hassled, drink alone
Not gonna stop until the whiskey runs dry

Chorus:
Escape the fate
Before it’s too late
It’s not an illusion
Or a $hitty mistake
From that ball of confusion
Make a clean break
And escape the fate
Escape the fate

Verse 3:
Look for heaven, find a crook
Don’t need no part of community greed
Keep your freedom, don’t get took
Just get hooked up with some devil’s weed

Verse 4:
So let’s wander, let’s all breathe
The day is coming when it’s overturned
Don’t give in, don’t believe
Just walk away and watch the money burn

[To Chorus]

Bridge:
There’s no story, there’s no news
Just denial and some useless clues
Tit’s in the wringer, ass in a sling
Nobody knows what tomorrow will bring

[To Chorus]

Tag:
From that ball of confusion
Lost in red tape
Make a clean break
And Escape the fate


~Bob