critique this song

jerdude · 31st March 2005, 07:32 PM

its called "crazy cruel".

put on your publishin' song pluggin pitchin hats and tell me if this tune is ready for the masses.

http://mywebpages.comcast.net/j.luzier/crazycruel.mp3

jerdude · 31st March 2005, 08:11 PM

well of course its autotuned.... doesn't everything that is supposed to be FM radio have to be autotuned?

i don't know.... as long as it doesn't have that cher...blee blee blee effect then i am ok with it sounding tuned. like i said.... everything on the radio sounds tuned to me.... no vibrato and perfect pitch changes.

again... what do i know

Agli · 1st April 2005, 12:59 AM

It's all good man. It takes a bit long to get started for todays goldfishpeople that have such short attention spans (go straight to a triple mega-harmony chorus and then a dual guitar solo battle with explosion sfx, that's what I would do). I always wanna kick that Maroon5 singer whenever I hear his robotised throat. But as you say everything is tuned nowadays so you'll probably be considered original or something if you'd drop that autotune.

Jose Mrochek · 1st April 2005, 01:34 AM

Drums should go in on 1:02 and cut to the second verse on 1:14.

Then it's ready for the masses : ) Cool song man. I don't mind the autotune. Sounds great to.

jerdude · 1st April 2005, 05:15 PM

thanks for the feedback dudes.

"you'll probably be considered original or something if you'd drop that autotune"

haha.

anybody think the song needs a bridge?

rynugz007 · 1st April 2005, 05:53 PM

it sounds great, really nice. The song itself sounds like it could be on a soundtrack but otherwise doesnt do anything for me at all. Its got that floaty, droning, mopy coldplay thing going on but there isnt anything in it thats interesting to me (melody, voice, orginality)

Jose Mrochek · 1st April 2005, 06:15 PM

[quote=rynugz007]it sounds great, really nice. The song itself sounds like it could be on a soundtrack but otherwise doesnt do anything for me at all. Its got that floaty, droning, mopy coldplay thing going on but there isnt anything in it thats interesting to me (melody, voice, orginality)[/QUOTE

I disagree. I wouldn't change the dial if I heard this on the radio.

Jose Mrochek · 1st April 2005, 06:47 PM

Quote:

anybody think the song needs a bridge?

nope

jerdude · 1st April 2005, 06:55 PM

hey thanks Jose!

i actually wondered if it was kinda soundtrack-ish. its definetly meant to be a little trippy.... in a pop sorta way.

rainsinvelvet · 1st April 2005, 07:04 PM

I enjoyed the song.
One thing:
I'm not sure if it's because it was noticed by others ,but I def. hear the auto tune at times. I would back it off just a bit like the other fellow said.

All in all, I thought it was cool. Maybe it could use some more dynamics, but thats just a personal preferance.

Sounds good.

ERic

Jose Mrochek · 1st April 2005, 10:50 PM

I never understood the term "soundtrackish". What does that exactly mean ?

Cause I've had some songs of mine referred as that as well. "would be good for a soundtrack" ???

R2OS · 3rd April 2005, 01:34 AM

I have only one thing to say.

Great track.

Sharp11 · 4th April 2005, 05:40 AM

I like the vibe, the production and the general song, but as one poster suggested, it needs a bridge, it just goes nowhere.

Then again, much of today's music plods along in this way, so........

Ed

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31st March 2005, 07:32 PM	#1
jerdude Gear maniac Join Date: Apr 2004 Location: L.A. Lower Arnold Posts: 277	critique this song its called "crazy cruel". put on your publishin' song pluggin pitchin hats and tell me if this tune is ready for the masses. http://mywebpages.comcast.net/j.luzier/crazycruel.mp3

1st April 2005, 01:34 AM	#4
Jose Mrochek Lives for gear Join Date: Apr 2004 Location: Miami, FL Posts: 3,845	Drums should go in on 1:02 and cut to the second verse on 1:14. Then it's ready for the masses : ) Cool song man. I don't mind the autotune. Sounds great to. __________________ www.thejoti.com www.myspace.com/thejoti http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xYtPFPrHut0 ¨But, then again, I'm British and think you Yanks with your fancy pre for each track are a bunch of weirdos¨ Mark

1st April 2005, 05:53 PM	#6
rynugz007 Gear addict Join Date: Dec 2003 Location: cincinnati, OH Posts: 308	it sounds great, really nice. The song itself sounds like it could be on a soundtrack but otherwise doesnt do anything for me at all. Its got that floaty, droning, mopy coldplay thing going on but there isnt anything in it thats interesting to me (melody, voice, orginality) __________________ "heres 50 bucks in case i call you a bitch later"

1st April 2005, 06:15 PM	#7
Jose Mrochek Lives for gear Join Date: Apr 2004 Location: Miami, FL Posts: 3,845	[quote=rynugz007]it sounds great, really nice. The song itself sounds like it could be on a soundtrack but otherwise doesnt do anything for me at all. Its got that floaty, droning, mopy coldplay thing going on but there isnt anything in it thats interesting to me (melody, voice, orginality)[/QUOTE I disagree. I wouldn't change the dial if I heard this on the radio. __________________ www.thejoti.com www.myspace.com/thejoti http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xYtPFPrHut0 ¨But, then again, I'm British and think you Yanks with your fancy pre for each track are a bunch of weirdos¨ Mark

31st March 2005, 08:11 PM	#2
jerdude Gear maniac Join Date: Apr 2004 Location: L.A. Lower Arnold Posts: 277	well of course its autotuned.... doesn't everything that is supposed to be FM radio have to be autotuned? i don't know.... as long as it doesn't have that cher...blee blee blee effect then i am ok with it sounding tuned. like i said.... everything on the radio sounds tuned to me.... no vibrato and perfect pitch changes. again... what do i know

1st April 2005, 12:59 AM	#3
Agli Gear maniac Join Date: Jun 2004 Posts: 260	It's all good man. It takes a bit long to get started for todays goldfishpeople that have such short attention spans (go straight to a triple mega-harmony chorus and then a dual guitar solo battle with explosion sfx, that's what I would do). I always wanna kick that Maroon5 singer whenever I hear his robotised throat. But as you say everything is tuned nowadays so you'll probably be considered original or something if you'd drop that autotune.

1st April 2005, 05:15 PM	#5
jerdude Gear maniac Join Date: Apr 2004 Location: L.A. Lower Arnold Posts: 277	thanks for the feedback dudes. "you'll probably be considered original or something if you'd drop that autotune" haha. anybody think the song needs a bridge?

1st April 2005, 06:55 PM	#9
jerdude Gear maniac Join Date: Apr 2004 Location: L.A. Lower Arnold Posts: 277	hey thanks Jose! i actually wondered if it was kinda soundtrack-ish. its definetly meant to be a little trippy.... in a pop sorta way.

1st April 2005, 07:04 PM	#10
rainsinvelvet Lives for gear Join Date: Sep 2003 Location: California Posts: 1,036	I enjoyed the song. One thing: I'm not sure if it's because it was noticed by others ,but I def. hear the auto tune at times. I would back it off just a bit like the other fellow said. All in all, I thought it was cool. Maybe it could use some more dynamics, but thats just a personal preferance. Sounds good. ERic

1st April 2005, 10:50 PM	#11
Jose Mrochek Lives for gear Join Date: Apr 2004 Location: Miami, FL Posts: 3,845	I never understood the term "soundtrackish". What does that exactly mean ? Cause I've had some songs of mine referred as that as well. "would be good for a soundtrack" ??? __________________ www.thejoti.com www.myspace.com/thejoti http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xYtPFPrHut0 ¨But, then again, I'm British and think you Yanks with your fancy pre for each track are a bunch of weirdos¨ Mark

3rd April 2005, 01:34 AM	#12
R2OS Gear interested Join Date: Apr 2005 Location: Twilight Zone Posts: 18	I have only one thing to say. Great track.

4th April 2005, 05:40 AM	#13
Sharp11 Gear addict Join Date: May 2004 Location: Connecticut USA Posts: 388	I like the vibe, the production and the general song, but as one poster suggested, it needs a bridge, it just goes nowhere. Then again, much of today's music plods along in this way, so........ Ed

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