Looking for criticism

[balcany328]

First off Hi everyone! im new to forum been ghost for a couple years now. although im not new to music but am very New to mixing, been playing around alot until now im kinda at a standstill. Ive read many techniques as to mixing vocals and tried many diff. things out.To me it still sucks. lol my setup aint nothing too crazy either...... Working on some new tracks this was put together last night jus lookin for some yays or nays. Any suggestions would be greatly appreciated. thanks in advance.

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[balcany328]

must be real bad.

[Kammy J]

Yep!

...nah I'm just kidding actually not bad! Cool beat, cool sound, I don't really know what to say about it other than it gets a little repetitive (the chorus and verse basically have the same music). But if you're a beginner in the game this is actually really good, man. What software do you use?

[sluttiedude]

nice job. good vocal performance. the vocals keep moving on (intensity/emotion-wise).. but the music goes no where.
2 cons for the music
#1 it's not nearly as gansta as the rap.. you don't need to fill out the background.. let it breathe.. syncopation baby!
#2 the string arrangements are corny
(not sure if you were asking for content criticism)
the mix sounds pretty good

[Mr. Liszt]

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[balcany328]

WOW! thanks alot, actually im even more inspired I know the mixing isnt the best but seriously thank you...all i deal with is real music with real life emotion...ill keep at it.

[sluttiedude]

um.. sure troy

i agree w the dynamic issue on the beat.. but that is just a fine detail.
but the comparison to other rap on this forum is plain bad word here
if i wanted criticism on a song, "you are better than garbage" does not help me in any way.
i'm not even gonna start about the label comments

encouragement is great.. but it can easily lead to a faux sense of achievement (dur?)

[quincyg]

most interesting vocal sound that i have heard in a long time. sort of raspy/crackly. i think the originality of your voice could take you a long way.

[Baz]

You definitely have a unique, cool vocal tone. It's almost like what if Gnarls Barkley rapped. Keep it going, man!

[bassistmarty]

I thought the vocal had potential...The closest music that I listen to that is close to hip-hop or rap is Buck 65 or Beck, stuff that makes you think not really gangsta.

[balcany328]

I really appreciate the feedback. As far as arguing over music being "gangsta" thats not me. I feel like music should have a point a purpose, not just be a way to show off what u can afford or talk bout how real or gangsta you think you are. but if thats how u express yourself then fine. to each his own. I like deep thought out type shit therfore I write it. Nobody makes the kind of music I like to listen to so i have to make it. anyway if anyone is interested in hearing another

take it easy

[Elvis]

yeah, thats the s***! Most potential Ive heard in a while. unique voice great rhymes and delivery. production does need work though. u just need a better, professionally produced beat.

[sluttiedude]

*sigh*

you can take what i said in whatver context that will help you..
i meant that the music was not agreeing w the vox (which was very emotional and aggressive IMHO)
and by gangsta, i was not referring to cars & bitches lol

i like the second tune. the music is more congruent w the vox

troy.. if you want to critique me, be my guest

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