dance/rnb radio song

s34nsm411 · 30th June 2008, 03:12 AM

SoundClick artist: s34nsm411 - studio account. everything here mixed/produced by me!
just finished tracking this one. bass and acoustic guitar are the only real instruments on this one for a change. havent done too many songs like this so some constructive criticism would be welcome!

song is called "sunset12"

A DJ · 30th June 2008, 08:16 AM

I think the kick and snare and very weak, and they should be brought out more, especially since it's a dance track. It could also be the sounds that were chosen.

The adlibs on the chorus "it's all right" "all night" seem to overpower the main line to me. I think they should be turned down just a little. They don't overlap much with the main line, so it's not a huge deal, but I would turn them down just a little.

Other than that, it sounds like a very clean mix. The track is catchy.

quincyg · 1st July 2008, 01:02 AM

didn't see any rnb track at that link.

s34nsm411 · 1st July 2008, 02:16 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by A DJ

I think the kick and snare and very weak, and they should be brought out more, especially since it's a dance track. It could also be the sounds that were chosen.

The adlibs on the chorus "it's all right" "all night" seem to overpower the main line to me. I think they should be turned down just a little. They don't overlap much with the main line, so it's not a huge deal, but I would turn them down just a little.

Other than that, it sounds like a very clean mix. The track is catchy.

yeah after listening with fresh ears the samples do kinda suck

Quote:

Originally Posted by quincyg

didn't see any rnb track at that link.

whoops, probably should mention the title of it to avoid confusion. and maybe rnb wasnt the best genre to describe it as

A DJ · 2nd July 2008, 04:17 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by s34nsm411

yeah after listening with fresh ears the samples do kinda suck

Well it might be hard to fix it, but you could try doubling them, have one pitched shift down, and/or layer more sounds.

Awedeeoh · 7th July 2008, 09:03 PM

I agree the kick and snare sound realllllyyy week..need to be stronger.

as far as the song goes..its just not my cup of tea....especially the lyrical content just seems like every R&B/boy band type-Pop cliche from 1998-2005 was taken and put into one song. Ya know just the "baby you're driving me crazy" "Cant explain how you got me feeling babygirl you're amazing" "I wanna be your man, i wanna give you the world baby girl oh oh oh love from up above" (not saying those are the exact lines just giving examples of what i'm talking about)

I just feel like its been done before and every line in that song has just been beaten to death and at a certain point just becomes a parody of itself.

I by no way mean this in a rude way, I just think you could do better lyrically and not follow such an obvious formula.

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30th June 2008, 08:16 AM	#2
A DJ Gear interested Join Date: Nov 2007 Posts: 23	I think the kick and snare and very weak, and they should be brought out more, especially since it's a dance track. It could also be the sounds that were chosen. The adlibs on the chorus "it's all right" "all night" seem to overpower the main line to me. I think they should be turned down just a little. They don't overlap much with the main line, so it's not a huge deal, but I would turn them down just a little. Other than that, it sounds like a very clean mix. The track is catchy.

1st July 2008, 01:02 AM	#3
quincyg Lives for gear Join Date: Mar 2006 Posts: 1,417	didn't see any rnb track at that link.

7th July 2008, 09:03 PM	#6
Awedeeoh Gear interested Join Date: May 2008 Posts: 13	I agree the kick and snare sound realllllyyy week..need to be stronger. as far as the song goes..its just not my cup of tea....especially the lyrical content just seems like every R&B/boy band type-Pop cliche from 1998-2005 was taken and put into one song. Ya know just the "baby you're driving me crazy" "Cant explain how you got me feeling babygirl you're amazing" "I wanna be your man, i wanna give you the world baby girl oh oh oh love from up above" (not saying those are the exact lines just giving examples of what i'm talking about) I just feel like its been done before and every line in that song has just been beaten to death and at a certain point just becomes a parody of itself. I by no way mean this in a rude way, I just think you could do better lyrically and not follow such an obvious formula.