looking for feedback !!!!! new R&B joint

gdeusthewhizkid · 29th June 2008, 11:58 PM

Hey slutz.

this is the first time i posted a track for review on this forum. Just wanted to get some feedback on a new joint i did with an upcoming songwriter/singer by the name of 'Shelle. The song is called "Keep a Secret" check it here MySpace.com - G.Deus Music - Essex County, New Jersey - R&B / Hip Hop / Pop - www.myspace.com/gdeusmusic

let me know what you guys think.. what it's missing what could be added the works...

Kammy J · 30th June 2008, 02:24 AM

Pretty hot tune!
If it was my production, I'd bring in some type of synth bass line that's more audible. It seems like there's a lot of space that's calling for a hot bass line.

Also, I'd make the snare hit a lot harder to make it more danceable. It's pretty soft in the mix, and you can't really even tell it's there until you look for it. I'd wait until the part when she sings "then i see one who catches my eye" to introduce it. I'd probably roll with a big clap or something with possibly a hit hat on the 2nd beat of the bar for that "sss kah" sound.

It's a pretty hot beat though and good song overall. Singer's great, and it's pretty catchy. I feel like the vox could sparkle a little more, they seem a little bare bones (flat, EQ-wise) at parts. Also, they may be sexier if they were more up front in the mix.

Just some recommendations to consider, but by no means necessary... all a matter of taste.

Good work.

gdeusthewhizkid · 7th July 2008, 04:30 AM

thanks for the feedback. I know the mix is a issue. I appreciate the words you said. Ill remember all that when i go get this joint mixed. thanks again..

I would appreciate more feedback also..... from other people.

Awedeeoh · 7th July 2008, 08:32 PM

I feel like theres a bit too much reverb on the lead vocal...they sound like they need to fit in the track a bit better. The background vocals sound a bit muffled to me as well. The contrast between the lead vocal, which is really bright and reverby and the background vocals which are a bit darker and muffled just doesnt sit well in my ears.

And yeah as someone else said i'd like to hear a more prominent snare

Just my opinion/ears though.

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29th June 2008, 11:58 PM	#1
gdeusthewhizkid Gear maniac Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: jersey Posts: 232	looking for feedback !!!!! new R&B joint Hey slutz. this is the first time i posted a track for review on this forum. Just wanted to get some feedback on a new joint i did with an upcoming songwriter/singer by the name of 'Shelle. The song is called "Keep a Secret" check it here MySpace.com - G.Deus Music - Essex County, New Jersey - R&B / Hip Hop / Pop - www.myspace.com/gdeusmusic let me know what you guys think.. what it's missing what could be added the works... __________________ Check out my productions at www.myspace.com/gdeusmusic www.pmpworldwide.com/gdeus and some EP's i put out @ www.cdbaby.com/steevesam http://www.amazon.com/Avnah/dp/B001B...8143218&sr=8-1

30th June 2008, 02:24 AM	#2
Kammy J Gear Head Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: Portland Posts: 49	Pretty hot tune! If it was my production, I'd bring in some type of synth bass line that's more audible. It seems like there's a lot of space that's calling for a hot bass line. Also, I'd make the snare hit a lot harder to make it more danceable. It's pretty soft in the mix, and you can't really even tell it's there until you look for it. I'd wait until the part when she sings "then i see one who catches my eye" to introduce it. I'd probably roll with a big clap or something with possibly a hit hat on the 2nd beat of the bar for that "sss kah" sound. It's a pretty hot beat though and good song overall. Singer's great, and it's pretty catchy. I feel like the vox could sparkle a little more, they seem a little bare bones (flat, EQ-wise) at parts. Also, they may be sexier if they were more up front in the mix. Just some recommendations to consider, but by no means necessary... all a matter of taste. Good work. __________________ www.myspace.com/kameronjohnsonmusic

7th July 2008, 04:30 AM	#3
gdeusthewhizkid Gear maniac Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: jersey Posts: 232	thanks for the feedback. I know the mix is a issue. I appreciate the words you said. Ill remember all that when i go get this joint mixed. thanks again.. I would appreciate more feedback also..... from other people. __________________ Check out my productions at www.myspace.com/gdeusmusic www.pmpworldwide.com/gdeus and some EP's i put out @ www.cdbaby.com/steevesam http://www.amazon.com/Avnah/dp/B001B...8143218&sr=8-1

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7th July 2008, 08:32 PM	#4
Awedeeoh Gear interested Join Date: May 2008 Posts: 13	I feel like theres a bit too much reverb on the lead vocal...they sound like they need to fit in the track a bit better. The background vocals sound a bit muffled to me as well. The contrast between the lead vocal, which is really bright and reverby and the background vocals which are a bit darker and muffled just doesnt sit well in my ears. And yeah as someone else said i'd like to hear a more prominent snare Just my opinion/ears though.