2nd song to shop in nashville this week

gundling · 5th June 2008, 11:25 AM

So here's another one.. had to do a LOT of lyrical rewriting with this one...

Mix is a little rough and sparse... but I laid this all down in 2 hours, so I'll go back to it after I sleep and do my day job.

Another one of my uncle's ideas, but far better than the last one... Last time everyone was interested in lyrics and melody far more than production. That's what I'm interested in here.

"Nickel for 50 cent"

tms8707056 · 5th June 2008, 03:13 PM

Better than the last one as far as lyrics are concerned. There is just something about it that doesn't click. It seems like a novelty song that would be on an album from a theme park entertainer. I don't think this one could ever be a hit because it directly "attacks" (for lack of a better word) 50 Cent.

gundling · 5th June 2008, 04:26 PM

That made me laugh... good thing there's a drawing board. LOL...

Elvis · 5th June 2008, 04:28 PM

yeah only rappers can attack other rappers and have it be a hit. weird for country to talk about rap. there is that song by phish or someone who covers gin and juice and it was kinda funny. if you wanna do it, it has to be way more ridiculous, over the top. think about how south park would approach it

e. ide make the whole song about how 50 is a snitch or somethin

Johnkenn · 5th June 2008, 05:00 PM

The production is really good - you sound great...really...but have you listened to country radio? This would be a killer songwriter round song - tongue in cheek kinda thing - but it's not something someone is going to sign you to a publishing deal over. Look - I think there's a lot of drivel on the radio right now - and I certainly think if you're writing for the radio, you're about two years behind the times, but there are some good songs out there. I would say pick out some great writers and listen to how they craft a song...Hugh Prestwood, Hillary Lindsey, Steven Dale Jones, Jeff Steele, Anthony Smith, etc...
These are great, but write something that means something - and I'm telling you, there's no reason you couldn't land a writing deal. Disregard all of this if you're a seasoned vet who put this up as a lark...

Audio Hombre · 5th June 2008, 06:44 PM

buddy would become a bullet magnet if he sang that song in the wrong place at the wrong time

.funny though

gundling · 5th June 2008, 11:26 PM

bullet magnet in the wrong crowd.. LOL... so true.

Thanks guys..

gundling · 6th June 2008, 04:12 PM

so maybe just a little too tongue and cheek, huh? LOL

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5th June 2008, 03:13 PM	#2
tms8707056 Gear maniac Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: Jackson, TN Posts: 187	Better than the last one as far as lyrics are concerned. There is just something about it that doesn't click. It seems like a novelty song that would be on an album from a theme park entertainer. I don't think this one could ever be a hit because it directly "attacks" (for lack of a better word) 50 Cent. __________________ Matt Snyder 15" MBP 2Ghz Core 2 Duo 2GB RAM, 2 320GB LaCie Quadra Drives, MOTU 828mk3, Logic Studio "There is no such thing as an old song, just bad ones."

5th June 2008, 04:28 PM	#4
Elvis Gear nut Join Date: Jun 2008 Location: Kansas City Posts: 89	yeah only rappers can attack other rappers and have it be a hit. weird for country to talk about rap. there is that song by phish or someone who covers gin and juice and it was kinda funny. if you wanna do it, it has to be way more ridiculous, over the top. think about how south park would approach it e. ide make the whole song about how 50 is a snitch or somethin __________________ "I want the one I can't have and it's driving me mad"

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Johnkenn Lives for gear Join Date: Aug 2005 Location: Nashville Posts: 1,821	The production is really good - you sound great...really...but have you listened to country radio? This would be a killer songwriter round song - tongue in cheek kinda thing - but it's not something someone is going to sign you to a publishing deal over. Look - I think there's a lot of drivel on the radio right now - and I certainly think if you're writing for the radio, you're about two years behind the times, but there are some good songs out there. I would say pick out some great writers and listen to how they craft a song...Hugh Prestwood, Hillary Lindsey, Steven Dale Jones, Jeff Steele, Anthony Smith, etc... These are great, but write something that means something - and I'm telling you, there's no reason you couldn't land a writing deal. Disregard all of this if you're a seasoned vet who put this up as a lark... __________________ "You take the blonde, I'll take the one in the turban..." *All opinions expressed herein are subject to change at listener's whim and/or ability to pay... http://www.myspace.com/johnkennedysongs

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5th June 2008, 04:26 PM	#3
gundling Gear nut Join Date: May 2007 Posts: 124	That made me laugh... good thing there's a drawing board. LOL...

5th June 2008, 06:44 PM	#6
Audio Hombre Lives for gear Join Date: Sep 2005 Posts: 987	buddy would become a bullet magnet if he sang that song in the wrong place at the wrong time .funny though

5th June 2008, 11:26 PM	#7
gundling Gear nut Join Date: May 2007 Posts: 124	bullet magnet in the wrong crowd.. LOL... so true. Thanks guys..

6th June 2008, 04:12 PM	#8
gundling Gear nut Join Date: May 2007 Posts: 124	so maybe just a little too tongue and cheek, huh? LOL