Ok, I wasn't going to say anything, as negative comments when you're finished and need to get others excited about the result don't help much, but if you're looking for pointers on what to change (i.e. you ARE still going to change stuff....) then I'd say as mentioned up top, loose some high mids/top in everything.
Both the guitar and the vocal have to much tang. Like Rode NT1 type tang. Wants peeling back. And although I actually like the vocal fx the vocal signal itself seems to disembodied/thin and could do with a little low mid boost in the right place to put it back into "I can feel it not just hear it" land. Also the guitar, once shaved a bit of high mids/top off could do with a little more girth. The leslie hiss is too static and needs washing out with something else to make it less graspable and maybe also moving around a little more randomly with auto, maybe very slight panning. I would duck it with the guitar and also remove it gradually when it goes, not just like that. Needs to be a feeling you can't easily pin down. A few tucks in timing for things to 'land' better here and there and altogether then it would be a lot more pleasant for me. Sounds like guitar and vocal are recorded separately, i.e. it doesn't feel cohesive in timing/expression here and there. A little timing tuck and some ducking of the guitar by the vocal will help.
And yes, I agree I reckon he does have talent. The song's production arrangement and instrumentation wise is a bit unfocused, but hey ho.
Try and make it so the lyric shines out and means the words more, which will happen to some extent with the suggested changes and a little balancing. Let the belly of the vocal lean out a bit or the lyric won't mean a thing and his believability goes flying.
Hope some of that is of use, as like I said, I didn't want to come in here and rain on parades, but if you're changing stuff......
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