Tell me what's wrong with this song...

soundonground · 29th April 2010

Hi,

I'm going to say absolutely nothing and direct you to this clip from a song I am recording/producing.

It is unmixed/unfinished...

Can you tell me anything you think is wrong with it, in terms of production & arrangement?

Please remember these two words:

'Constructive Criticism'

http://soundcloud.com/backlanemusic/universe-4

bobx · 29th April 2010

broken link

soundonground · 29th April 2010

Hi, try again...

soundonground · 29th April 2010

Should be working now. Any thoughts anyone?

soundonground · 30th April 2010

Is it bad?

roman manlord · 30th April 2010

I hear nothing wrong with it. Good song.

kingdice86 · 30th April 2010

vocals sound too close...some reverb?
didn't think the drum sample fit the pastural texture (the constant 16th note hats detract from the natural acoustic pulse of the strings)...brushes would sound great, don't you think?

nice tune, though

pineapple · 30th April 2010

I like it.

Only a detail: Over the 13 second I can hear something "strange" on voice. I don't know if it's a digital clipping or a little distortion or it's the same voice.

Can you check if it's an unwanted issue?

Nice job

soundonground · 1st May 2010

Quote:

Originally Posted by pineapple

I like it.

Only a detail: Over the 13 second I can hear something "strange" on voice. I don't know if it's a digital clipping or a little distortion or it's the same voice.

Can you check if it's an unwanted issue?

Nice job

Hi I'm not sure what you mean, can you describe it a bit better?

I am mainly concerned with the arrangement of the song- i.e. the tempo and flow. The bouzouki is out of tune in some places (an intonation set problem) but I hope to fix this with Melodyne. The vocals are not in keeping with the tempo at the beginning of the song, and that's why I opted for the piano chord idea, with bouzouki intertwined.

I am not keeping the drum machine pattern either.

soundonground · 1st May 2010

Just realised what the noise was at 13 seconds. I think it is the singers wheezy voice.

pineapple · 3rd May 2010

Yes, probably is the same voice.

soundonground · 3rd May 2010

What is the piano and guitar playing like?

Amun Ra · 3rd May 2010

The instruments don't really sync rythmically with the voice in the intro.

john caldwell · 3rd May 2010

Tempo/rhythm problems mark the intro passage. Afterwards, the rhythm is more solid but the sequenced drum part would not have been my choice for the track - particularly the spitty hat sound. I'd reconsider the eq on her voice just a bit: There is a low midrange emphasis that suggests she's singing very close to the listener, which is intimate of course, but it's as though she's singing with hands cupped around her mouth. The guiatr and piano are adequately played, in my view.

Good luck and thanks for posting.

John-

29th April 2010	#1
soundonground Gear nut Joined: Jan 2009 Location: UK Posts: 124 Thread Starter	Tell me what's wrong with this song... Hi, I'm going to say absolutely nothing and direct you to this clip from a song I am recording/producing. It is unmixed/unfinished... Can you tell me anything you think is wrong with it, in terms of production & arrangement? Please remember these two words: 'Constructive Criticism' http://soundcloud.com/backlanemusic/universe-4

30th April 2010	#7
kingdice86 Gear nut Joined: Jun 2009 Posts: 149	vocals sound too close...some reverb? didn't think the drum sample fit the pastural texture (the constant 16th note hats detract from the natural acoustic pulse of the strings)...brushes would sound great, don't you think? nice tune, though __________________ "We're sorta like 7-Eleven. We're not always doing business, but we're always open."

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bobx Lives for gear Joined: Mar 2005 Location: Los Angeles, ca Posts: 855 1 Review written	broken link

30th April 2010	#6
roman manlord Gear maniac Joined: Jan 2010 Location: Mobile, AL Posts: 199	I hear nothing wrong with it. Good song.

30th April 2010	#8
pineapple Gear Head Joined: Apr 2010 Posts: 47	I like it. Only a detail: Over the 13 second I can hear something "strange" on voice. I don't know if it's a digital clipping or a little distortion or it's the same voice. Can you check if it's an unwanted issue? Nice job

1st May 2010	#10
soundonground Gear nut Joined: Jan 2009 Location: UK Posts: 124 Thread Starter	Just realised what the noise was at 13 seconds. I think it is the singers wheezy voice.

3rd May 2010	#11
pineapple Gear Head Joined: Apr 2010 Posts: 47	Yes, probably is the same voice.

3rd May 2010	#13
Amun Ra Gear addict Joined: May 2008 Location: Sweden Posts: 317	The instruments don't really sync rythmically with the voice in the intro.

3rd May 2010	#14
john caldwell Lives for gear Joined: Jul 2005 Location: Pittsburgh Posts: 1,169	Tempo/rhythm problems mark the intro passage. Afterwards, the rhythm is more solid but the sequenced drum part would not have been my choice for the track - particularly the spitty hat sound. I'd reconsider the eq on her voice just a bit: There is a low midrange emphasis that suggests she's singing very close to the listener, which is intimate of course, but it's as though she's singing with hands cupped around her mouth. The guiatr and piano are adequately played, in my view. Good luck and thanks for posting. John-