Looking for criticism

balcany328 · 30th June 2008

First off Hi everyone! im new to forum been ghost for a couple years now. although im not new to music but am very New to mixing, been playing around alot until now im kinda at a standstill. Ive read many techniques as to mixing vocals and tried many diff. things out.To me it still sucks. lol my setup aint nothing too crazy either...... Working on some new tracks this was put together last night jus lookin for some yays or nays. Any suggestions would be greatly appreciated. thanks in advance.

callin ur #

balcany328 · 30th June 2008

must be real bad.

Kammy J · 30th June 2008

Yep!

...nah I'm just kidding actually not bad! Cool beat, cool sound, I don't really know what to say about it other than it gets a little repetitive (the chorus and verse basically have the same music). But if you're a beginner in the game this is actually really good, man. What software do you use?

sluttiedude · 30th June 2008

nice job. good vocal performance. the vocals keep moving on (intensity/emotion-wise).. but the music goes no where.
2 cons for the music
#1 it's not nearly as gansta as the rap.. you don't need to fill out the background.. let it breathe.. syncopation baby!
#2 the string arrangements are corny
(not sure if you were asking for content criticism)
the mix sounds pretty good

Mr. Liszt · 30th June 2008

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balcany328 · 1st July 2008

WOW! thanks alot, actually im even more inspired I know the mixing isnt the best but seriously thank you...all i deal with is real music with real life emotion...ill keep at it.

sluttiedude · 1st July 2008

um.. sure troy

i agree w the dynamic issue on the beat.. but that is just a fine detail.
but the comparison to other rap on this forum is plain bad word here
if i wanted criticism on a song, "you are better than garbage" does not help me in any way.
i'm not even gonna start about the label comments

encouragement is great.. but it can easily lead to a faux sense of achievement (dur?)

quincyg · 1st July 2008

most interesting vocal sound that i have heard in a long time. sort of raspy/crackly. i think the originality of your voice could take you a long way.

Baz · 1st July 2008

You definitely have a unique, cool vocal tone. It's almost like what if Gnarls Barkley rapped. Keep it going, man!

bassistmarty · 2nd July 2008

I thought the vocal had potential...The closest music that I listen to that is close to hip-hop or rap is Buck 65 or Beck, stuff that makes you think not really gangsta.

balcany328 · 2nd July 2008

I really appreciate the feedback. As far as arguing over music being "gangsta" thats not me. I feel like music should have a point a purpose, not just be a way to show off what u can afford or talk bout how real or gangsta you think you are. but if thats how u express yourself then fine. to each his own. I like deep thought out type shit therfore I write it. Nobody makes the kind of music I like to listen to so i have to make it. anyway if anyone is interested in hearing another

take it easy

Elvis · 3rd July 2008

yeah, thats the s***! Most potential Ive heard in a while. unique voice great rhymes and delivery. production does need work though. u just need a better, professionally produced beat.

sluttiedude · 10th July 2008

*sigh*

you can take what i said in whatver context that will help you..
i meant that the music was not agreeing w the vox (which was very emotional and aggressive IMHO)
and by gangsta, i was not referring to cars & bitches lol

i like the second tune. the music is more congruent w the vox

troy.. if you want to critique me, be my guest

MySpace.com - Flune - PHILADELPHIA, Pennsylvania - Rock / Progressive / Gothic - www.myspace.com/flune

track is "I Can't Explain"

30th June 2008	#3
Kammy J Gear nut Joined: Apr 2008 Location: Portland, Oregon Posts: 85	Yep! ...nah I'm just kidding actually not bad! Cool beat, cool sound, I don't really know what to say about it other than it gets a little repetitive (the chorus and verse basically have the same music). But if you're a beginner in the game this is actually really good, man. What software do you use? __________________ www.kameronjohnson.com

2nd July 2008	#10
bassistmarty Gear Head Joined: Mar 2008 Posts: 41	I thought the vocal had potential...The closest music that I listen to that is close to hip-hop or rap is Buck 65 or Beck, stuff that makes you think not really gangsta. __________________ http://www.myspace.com/fantoalysteria Markham,Ontario

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Elvis Gear maniac Joined: Jun 2008 Location: Kansas City Posts: 212	yeah, thats the s***! Most potential Ive heard in a while. unique voice great rhymes and delivery. production does need work though. u just need a better, professionally produced beat. __________________ "I want the one I can't have and it's driving me mad"

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30th June 2008	#1
balcany328 Gear interested Joined: May 2008 Location: New Jersey Posts: 4 Thread Starter	Looking for criticism First off Hi everyone! im new to forum been ghost for a couple years now. although im not new to music but am very New to mixing, been playing around alot until now im kinda at a standstill. Ive read many techniques as to mixing vocals and tried many diff. things out.To me it still sucks. lol my setup aint nothing too crazy either...... Working on some new tracks this was put together last night jus lookin for some yays or nays. Any suggestions would be greatly appreciated. thanks in advance. callin ur #

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Mr. Liszt Gear addict Joined: Dec 2007 Location: Louisville, KY USA Posts: 393	...

1st July 2008	#6
balcany328 Gear interested Joined: May 2008 Location: New Jersey Posts: 4 Thread Starter	WOW! thanks alot, actually im even more inspired I know the mixing isnt the best but seriously thank you...all i deal with is real music with real life emotion...ill keep at it.

1st July 2008	#7
sluttiedude Gear Head Joined: Apr 2008 Posts: 55	um.. sure troy i agree w the dynamic issue on the beat.. but that is just a fine detail. but the comparison to other rap on this forum is plain bad word here if i wanted criticism on a song, "you are better than garbage" does not help me in any way. i'm not even gonna start about the label comments encouragement is great.. but it can easily lead to a faux sense of achievement (dur?)

1st July 2008	#8
quincyg Lives for gear Joined: Mar 2006 Posts: 2,154	most interesting vocal sound that i have heard in a long time. sort of raspy/crackly. i think the originality of your voice could take you a long way.

1st July 2008	#9
Baz Lives for gear Joined: Jan 2006 Location: Vancouver BC, Canada / San Diego CA ,USA Posts: 1,084	You definitely have a unique, cool vocal tone. It's almost like what if Gnarls Barkley rapped. Keep it going, man!

10th July 2008	#13
sluttiedude Gear Head Joined: Apr 2008 Posts: 55	sigh you can take what i said in whatver context that will help you.. i meant that the music was not agreeing w the vox (which was very emotional and aggressive IMHO) and by gangsta, i was not referring to cars & bitches lol i like the second tune. the music is more congruent w the vox troy.. if you want to critique me, be my guest MySpace.com - Flune - PHILADELPHIA, Pennsylvania - Rock / Progressive / Gothic - www.myspace.com/flune track is "I Can't Explain"