Production Suggestions For This Pop Song?

[Tempest19]

I enjoy writing songs but I seem to get lost a little in the production department. I've been playing this song over and over and Im quite sick of it now.

It just seems like its missing something but then again I try not to pack the song to the brim with instruments.

Thanks,

Chris.

[MYAMS]

get rid of the piano and percussion so ur just left with the strings, kick and snare and start again. I would rearrange a piano part, add little synth melodies, hey you could even add acoustic guitar!!

You may even want to consider scrapping everything and just sing your vocals along to basic guitar strums or piano chords depending on how you wrote it. The fact that you have gone through the process once and gained a better understanding of what works and what doesn't may help you envision a totally new and better production.

Remember- melody is everything! Make sure people can sing along to your music and it seems like you should be keeping your productions simple.

[Tempest19]

That bad huh?

I thought I did pretty good with this one. I mean the chorus is quite memorable, 'That girl is lucky, lucky lucky'

I've stripped it down as you suggested, I just cant figure out what else to add in there. I tried some synth melodies but it just doesn't seem to fit.

I wrote the song on my piano like always. Chords are like a C/C9, A/Am, E/Dmaj,E/Dsus4.

If anybody would like to have a shot that would be cool.

I'd still like to try and get it thick without adding too much more, perhaps thicken the harmonies in the chorus. Is that the part you think doesn't have enough impact?

Thanks,

[Freddy P]

Lyrics are very nice but I also feel the production just doesnt fit this words. Like suggested above just grab the vocals scrap everything and try again. A catchy melody to go with the chorus would make this song alot better.