New song demo, please give me some help.

ammaringnyc · 26th August 2004

Its just a demo. It will have real drum and bass. The lyrics and melody need to be more solid, it was a first take but any thoughts would be great.

www.memoryeraser.net/NeedSometime.mp3

Oh and check out the forum for a contest to win some gear and music.

http://www.memoryeraser.net/forum/viewtopic.php?t=42

ammaringnyc · 26th August 2004

wow this place is helpful.

cdog · 26th August 2004

Hey this is my outhouse to crap in... I am the lone purveyor of crappy lo-fi MP3s here, please find another forum to unleash your musical bowels upon.

The "singing" sounds like Barney the Purple Dinosaur after he drank a fifth of bourbon. Sweet

What vocal mic is that? Hmmm I wonder.... KSM27 perhaps grudge

ammaringnyc · 27th August 2004

My brain hurts right now must intake grease salvation.

RinnyTin · 27th August 2004

For starters, your primary goal should be a vocal that's in tune and mixed in a way so that the lyrics are discernable. Also, it would be nice if there were guitar PARTS rather than just multiple tracks of soloing throughout the song.

ammaringnyc · 27th August 2004

What do you mean about guitar parts. There is a verse part and a chorus part. It might need a bridge but there are parts.

Jose Mrochek · 28th August 2004

First of all ... how long have you been writing music ? Because, I see what you say and see what other people are commenting also. And both have their points. If you are just starting out, I think you have what it takes to be a good writer someday because you have some melodic things that are pretty cool. But you don't have the experience yet of knowing how or where to use them. Mostly in the song structure department. I'm assuming this is one of the first songs you ever wrote or recorded. Keep it up, people in this forum are high caliber commentators. Try posting when you hear something on the radio and you put it back to back with your songs ,and you think are of the same level. Anyhow.. good work. Keep on trying

ammaringnyc · 30th August 2004

I have been writing music for 10 years but haven't really done anything in the last 5 so this is a beginning of some new songs. THis was literally first take off the bat.

26th August 2004	#1
ammaringnyc Gear interested Joined: Aug 2004 Posts: 18 Thread Starter	New song demo, please give me some help. Its just a demo. It will have real drum and bass. The lyrics and melody need to be more solid, it was a first take but any thoughts would be great. www.memoryeraser.net/NeedSometime.mp3 Oh and check out the forum for a contest to win some gear and music. http://www.memoryeraser.net/forum/viewtopic.php?t=42

28th August 2004	#7
Jose Mrochek Lives for gear Joined: Apr 2004 Location: Miami, FL Posts: 3,830	First of all ... how long have you been writing music ? Because, I see what you say and see what other people are commenting also. And both have their points. If you are just starting out, I think you have what it takes to be a good writer someday because you have some melodic things that are pretty cool. But you don't have the experience yet of knowing how or where to use them. Mostly in the song structure department. I'm assuming this is one of the first songs you ever wrote or recorded. Keep it up, people in this forum are high caliber commentators. Try posting when you hear something on the radio and you put it back to back with your songs ,and you think are of the same level. Anyhow.. good work. Keep on trying __________________ www.thejoti.com www.myspace.com/thejoti http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=sR116su2Uuo ¨But, then again, I'm British and think you Yanks with your fancy pre for each track are a bunch of weirdos¨ Mark

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cdog Lives for gear Joined: Dec 2003 Location: Brooklyn Posts: 3,559 3 Reviews written	Hey this is my outhouse to crap in... I am the lone purveyor of crappy lo-fi MP3s here, please find another forum to unleash your musical bowels upon. The "singing" sounds like Barney the Purple Dinosaur after he drank a fifth of bourbon. Sweet What vocal mic is that? Hmmm I wonder.... KSM27 perhaps grudge

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ammaringnyc Gear interested Joined: Aug 2004 Posts: 18 Thread Starter	My brain hurts right now must intake grease salvation.

27th August 2004	#5
RinnyTin Gear maniac Joined: Nov 2003 Posts: 182	For starters, your primary goal should be a vocal that's in tune and mixed in a way so that the lyrics are discernable. Also, it would be nice if there were guitar PARTS rather than just multiple tracks of soloing throughout the song.

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ammaringnyc Gear interested Joined: Aug 2004 Posts: 18 Thread Starter	I have been writing music for 10 years but haven't really done anything in the last 5 so this is a beginning of some new songs. THis was literally first take off the bat.