acoustic track, production advice?

[warmer]

OK did a quick re record to give you all a better idea

FALL-01

really appreciate any production ideas.

[Rogervandeberg]

I like the song!

Some suggestions:

Vocals: i like the sound very much, but i think the vocals are a bit too loud in the mix and the first verse isn't articulated well, so i can't hear what you are singing.

Song: I think the song at this moment is a little bit too monotone. If it was my song i wuld be adding some acoustic bass guitar in the 2nd verse, ad a violin in the 2nd chorus and after that some percussion. The song needs to built up to a climax, but now its 4 minutes the same and i can imagine that that's too long for an average listener to be caught by an acoustic song where nothing really changes.

This is ofcourse my humble opinion

[warmer]

Hi, no I totaly agree, obviously doesn't help I haven't worked out the other verse lyrics yet! This is like a simple line drawing and I'm trying to work out what and how much colour to add, if you get what I mean?

I was thinking along the same lines as you, I can almost already hear an upright bass, so that is going in for sure. I would add a violin but I don't want to fall into the abc of production but then if it works, it works.


Any other ideas? I think I'm going to take this mic along to the studio because I think it work for my voice.

Cheers