please critique!

[fivedoor]

please pick holes in our recording!
first time recording with my band, in rehearsal rooms, v. basic equipment & set up here's a few tracks, lil bit of rev/delay added but pretty untampered:

http://www.worldofape.com/demos/IT'SONITSWAY2.mp3

(maybe get another up later depending on the level of derision!) interested in to know where to go from here - eq-ing, improving, . . . . .

the vibe searching for was old school, raw-ish -stones, sonics, plastic ono band, pixies, etc. etc.

thanks

[otherdoorstudio]

There are plenty of people out here who will want you to slam this thing up. But I think it's perfect. Love the song and the pace. Soul and patience. Nice work.

Are you signed?

Have you thought of touring the US?

[drakewire]

Irony is the stock in the trade of the new generation
There's a scene in the Simpson's episode where Homer joins Lolapalooza to have a cannon ball shot at him. One teenager says to the other, "That's cool" and the other asks if he's being sarcastic. "I can't tell anymore," comes the reply.

I can't tell if the lyric and delivery are intended as generation Y irony or a serious attempt at being unique. I found the production a nice attempt even though it sounds like there is a car on the side of a drum snare. Forget the production, you asked for your song to be critiqued.

Overall, its rather banal. I am not saying that it is not well deserving of another listen, but that would be about it. If your writing your music to play road shows to entertain an already drunk crowd then, I think you'll do just fine. If however, you are serious about this as a song that could deserve commercial success (and even though we all lie, this is to expensive of a dream to be a hobby), there are certain inevitable truths that need to form some kind of road for your sound. This has been done before by hundreds of acts, the music, the idea, and the over all tone.

I will say that the vocals are actually decent if they were recorded in a proper recording studio with someone with the know how. However, as of yet, this song has not quite achieved its production merits to begin discussing overall tone and balance.
The clanking of whatever that sound is, is overused throughout the song and is irritating. The bass is heavily distorted and not smooth. Forget the drums, they sound like they are in the whole "New York Compression method".
I think this song will impress some little girls, but wont impress record labels or radio stations.....

Of course, Im probably one of the hardest people on this board to get a review from... So perhaps, I am too hard on it, but working for a few years now in the A&R side has left be honest....

[warmer]

constructive criticism don't you just love it! I haven't got any advice on the recording all sounds good to me and I like the track, but what do I know?!

[Bo Jorgen]

OK song.

How about some more punch in the "It's on its way"? You know, a little grunge dynamite, so to speak? The song could handle it.

The sound of the band and the recording fits very well, I think. You've got a working concept here.

[djui5]

Too much room sound and not enough stereo image...IMO
Something isn't working right here. The sounds aren't playing well together.

[fivedoor]

thanks for the feedback-
I guess my curiosity was a lot 2wards how the recording sounded technically as I'm untrained & would like to get better. I wasn't quite putting it out there as something we felt "this is it!" etc. but I appreciate all the comments . . . .
have been trying out recording low-fi various songs and probably finding our feet /experimenting beyond that - but I would love to be more self sufficient at recording as I'm not a huge fan of a lot of modern digital maximized recording etc. or results I've had in studios over the years, still. . . we're using modernish equipment so we have to learn how to use it as best we can. . .
p.s. the drums were'nt compressed but did go through a valve pre maybe that has characterized them.
anyway for my sins there's more! http://www.worldofape.com/demos/getvicious.mp3
cheers