Thanks, good one. Another revision follows.As much as Id like to continue feedback as I near the end, this will be the last time Ill type all this crap out
Also, without phrasing and music you cant really "hear" it properly of course.
Thanks for all the comments. I think it still needs work, but flows a bit better and makes a bit more sense. They will continue to help as I try and knock it into its final form.
Doubt and despair but its all in your head
False riots abound and your feeling ya frown
Its never fortune or fall
plain to see
For once in your life stop the cut run and hide
Just beat on your drum cause soon your life will be done
You gunna flicker or fly
Its all here for you to see
Through wiser eyes now believe
Its all now down to you, achieve
Fly high to come alive.