Originally Posted by lukeforester1
Hey, thanks for your feedback! I appreciate you taking the time. Could I ask you to clarify what you mean by "at the least aim for a hooky title. 'We are free' doesn't seem to stick very well." I'm just not quite sure specifically what you mean.
I once heard a teacher say "Good production will make people dance, a good song will make them feel." so I totally agree with you on that.
Also, I posted in the EDM forum looking for a collaborator
No problems, thanks for replying, there's not a awful lot of love for pop around here so...
Your teacher is a smart man, but let me put it to you in another sense, if someone is building the house and your only job is to paint it, then you do your best to paint that house with the best tools you have , you have no control over the say the colour or the wall materials etc
BUT at the end of the day once that house is finished it maybe good or maybe crap, or good enough, but no matter what you can say that your contribution was 110% no regrets.
No oooh yeah I could've used the spatula here, but I though the roof was cover up that corner anyways.... etc
Don't leave it to chance.
I refer to great dance songs such as Titanium which I think the song writing is top notch with a great production, The storytelling/lyrics and production reinforce each other to drive the motion. Lyrics give permission for listeners to feel a certain way thats why they are important.
When I meant sticky, I mean memorable. Take it with a grain of salt as I didn't pour through your verses with a fine tooth comb. I listened probably once or twice.
I refer back to my example with Timber. A good song tie's up everything really well to pay off typically on the title/chorus.
It's not 'We're chopping trees, we're yelling timber'
. The hookiness includes the metaphor, it's going down in the club so here's the reason it's fun to yell Timber in a night club. The word timber by itself is pretty mundane but memorable in the given context that's been painted. It's setup all the way through the song and no one ever expected yell TIMBER! in a club....ever.
I could keep going but here's one last nugget.
Part of the dilemma of setting up a good payoff is racking up the tension, this means a good verses. Good verses put people's in the moment and ready's them want to sing the chorus to release the tension. Don't tell them they are having a bad week, their dog just died, describe it and let their imagination immerse themselve so they are experiencing it. This sounds a bit much but believe me it's subconscious. For example I would not say: 'we've climbed on the roof to run around and look at the stars after a shitty week of our day jobs, we're feeling really carefree now'
I would describe moments that would elude to that. Something like Verse
Dragging around, our worries set on overdrive
Chained to the gears, trapped in someone elses ride
I'm staring, waiting for time....
blah blah blah blah insert further imagery that sets up title here Prechorus
Stars are shining bright, shout it cross the roof tonght
you and I,
You and I are realigned, running at the speed of light
We are freeeeeeee blah blah blah
Does that make sense? This is just and example of a type of method I use to do this.