Hi everyone, I'm new to the forums. I have a very rough demo here, my main concern is that there may be too much going on. Although an overall critique would be nice. Thanks for your time! =)
Here's a REALLY rough mix of an acoustic kinda rocky poppy thing, featuring my first banjo recording and some notes I've never managed to hit before, thanks to a couple of singing lessons. Don't worry, it's not bluegrass. Worth sticking around for, for what happens at 1'45 I think.
Features a Chinese resonator guitar, a cheap Gibson banjo, and me clutching my balls to get those notes in the bridge.
Features a Chinese resonator guitar, a cheap Gibson banjo, and me clutching my balls to get those notes in the bridge.
How can anyone resist having a listen when the "clutching brass" plugin is being used?!
Since this is a rough mix, I won't offer any crits. but felt it was important to let you know that I enjoyed the listen. Catchy tune..., notwithstanding the very special CB fx. Very well done!
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This is only my 2nd ever mix guys so be please be gentle, we're all civilized here.
I like the lyrics, but I'm not in love with the tone of everything at all times.
The very beginning and end are supposed to be muffled but the rest shouldn't be. Here it is! New Single! Melody (DEMO) - Logan Martin - YouTube
This is a one-take acoustic demo of a sad little song I wrote in the fall. I'm still kind of pondering how it should be arranged, or if it should just stay as a simple G&G track. Opinions welcome.
I really liked this. Did you ever try keeping it in the first person? Using my, me and I etc?
Thank you - that's just the type of critique I was looking for
I've just finished home-baking organic spelt bread; reading Edge; planning a visit to the Hockney exhibition at the Royal Academy; & working on a video for this track (based on a melody I penned):
I hope this meets with your approval
Good work. Good skill. Have you ever played around with the pop formula?
I really liked this. Did you ever try keeping it in the first person? Using my, me and I etc?
Very nice.
Thank you! It's an interesting idea, but I'm not sure it really works in first person, to be honest. With the 'you's it's mean to sound kind of compassionate and the little flip at the end is meant to turn it from a sad song into an encouraging one (ie it goes from 'the sun doesn't give a shit how bad you feel' to 'even though you feel bad now the sun's still going to shine and eventually you'll feel better').
If you substitute the 'I' then it sounds strangely knowing and dispassionate to me, like someone giving advice to themselves that they already know.
When I sing it I imagine I'm talking to someone who's feeling really shit because they just got dumped by someone they love, trying to empathise and then pull them out of the pit.
Good work. Good skill. Have you ever played around with the pop formula?
Thank you. I haven't made any regular pop songs as such but have been helping a friend in recording pop song covers as prep for a live band. I do like the genre but I haven't written 'the one' yet...lol. Most of my music is quite leftfield and/or eclectic.
I finished the Ocean Symphony Project and I'm now working on another video set to Oliver Sadie's music. The Ocean Symphony (and the 'Making of' video) are here: Arthur Stone - YouTube
...also at the link above are the River Project videos.
Since the demo I've been working on a short film with a composer Patrick Edward Fagan (also on Soundcloud); this is the latest preview:
Hopefully I will get round to finishing my first album next year.
YOu may need loudish speakers basically because Im a terrible producer. Would appreciate any comments on soundcloud. Contructive criticism welcome. Praise even more so.
First-time poster at Gearslutz. Been lurking for some time now. A little bit about my set-up:
I use PT MP-8 and am fine with that for my purposes, which is recording song sketches and learning how to mix them. The interface is a fast track ultra and I also use a true systems p-solo. I like the p-solo and it is the only “outboard” pre that I have. Haven't used any others, really!
I do not have an SM7, U87 any 500 series preamps or anything that might be considered “high-end” gear.
My mic stash is: AKG Perception 820, Peluso CEMC6 pair, sE 2200a II (multi-pattern version), Beta 58a, 2xRode NT3 – that’s what I got for mics. I am digging the sE mic.
I do actually like Waves products (V-series EQs and Comp seem to work well and the H-EQ and H-Comp are so versatile) and dig the V9 cloud/license thingy.
My recording space is my living room and it is pretty spacious with a ceiling that is about 15 feet tall and has many non-parallel walls/surfaces. Although it could be “treated” more, I have a few home made gobos (wood and auralex) that do a pretty good damn good job of creating isolated mini-spaces wherever I want to set up. I’d like to get a ceiling cloud up top at some point.
Anyway, since this is a post to the songwriter threads, I've got a sketch I just did. The track started with vocals and acoustic gtr with two mics (used the sE and a peluso for all); was messing around the other night with an idea and spur of the moment came up with the words to this tune. Then I added a few instruments and such over top, polishing it off tonight. The song needs to be worked on some more as far as making it more interesting and having an actual arrangement and more “thought-out” vocals. Of course I'd like some drums, but I don't have any of that crap. Any critique with respect to arrangement/lyrics/ideas to enhance are appreciated. Hell, I’ll even take thoughts about the mixing that I did.
First-time poster at Gearslutz. Been lurking for some time now. A little bit about my set-up:
I use PT MP-8 and am fine with that for my purposes, which is recording song sketches and learning how to mix them. The interface is a fast track ultra and I also use a true systems p-solo. I like the p-solo and it is the only “outboard” pre that I have. Haven't used any others, really!
I do not have an SM7, U87 any 500 series preamps or anything that might be considered “high-end” gear.
My mic stash is: AKG Perception 820, Peluso CEMC6 pair, sE 2200a II (multi-pattern version), Beta 58a, 2xRode NT3 – that’s what I got for mics. I am digging the sE mic.
I do actually like Waves products (V-series EQs and Comp seem to work well and the H-EQ and H-Comp are so versatile) and dig the V9 cloud/license thingy.
My recording space is my living room and it is pretty spacious with a ceiling that is about 15 feet tall and has many non-parallel walls/surfaces. Although it could be “treated” more, I have a few home made gobos (wood and auralex) that do a pretty good damn good job of creating isolated mini-spaces wherever I want to set up. I’d like to get a ceiling cloud up top at some point.
Anyway, since this is a post to the songwriter threads, I've got a sketch I just did. The track started with vocals and acoustic gtr with two mics (used the sE and a peluso for all); was messing around the other night with an idea and spur of the moment came up with the words to this tune. Then I added a few instruments and such over top, polishing it off tonight. The song needs to be worked on some more as far as making it more interesting and having an actual arrangement and more “thought-out” vocals. Of course I'd like some drums, but I don't have any of that crap. Any critique with respect to arrangement/lyrics/ideas to enhance are appreciated. Hell, I’ll even take thoughts about the mixing that I did.
I like everything about this. The only critique I might give is the lyrics in the chorus don't seem to really relate to the verses.
I like the turn around in the chord progression at the end of the chorus- its kind of unexpected and resolves nicely back to the verse.
Could use drums, but also works as a stripped down acoustic thing. Is that a trumpet at the end? I like it... Maybe a more fleshed out horn arrangement would be cool too.
I can hear TheMe 2 Fam in a sound track to a film... Quinten?
Definately a trip... kinda a throwback to 70's, cool///
Kick is real blurry, muddy. Its a little distracting? hi Hat could maybe sound sligthly less sharp in my headphones? But on 'self' hi hat sounds better. The songs are cool!
My Dad and I were talking how pop music nowadays don't make stuff that you can sing along with. I was telling him how I was watching sullivan show performances were so good, they could have been the studio recording! He then told me he was curious lately so he looked up the top 100 songs from 1967. And he was surpsied that he knew about half of them. He saw song listed #28 of 100 and thought to himself "wow, thats a good song... the 28th best song in 67 is still more memorable than songs from today".
To me, he's right. I mean in the last 12 years, what? oops I did it again comes to mind. But what else? "Can't buy me love" comes to mind? Oops... (does itunes re-release count?)
This song has something that modern music is lacking. A melody, honest delivery, and a genuine connection with the listener. Well done.
Here's a cover that I recorded a few months ago.. I produced all of the music except for the backing vocals (my sister helped me). Let me know what you think about the mix, eq, content, etc. You may need to crank up the volume a bit.
Original by Lincoln Brewster - "More than Amazing"
Well seeing as there apparently isn't judgment for crappy recordings according to the original post, I guess it won't hurt to post my song. I'm quite new to recording and have been writing songs for just under a year, so no harsh criticism please. Constructive criticism is ok though, just be gentle, I'm fragile... Well seeing as there apparently isn't judgment for crappy recordings according to the original post, I guess it won't hurt to post my song. I'm quite new to recording and have been writing songs for just under a year, so no harsh criticism please. Constructive criticism is ok though, just be gentle, I'm fragile... http://soundcloud.com/oolalavsuperfu...-working-title
This is something I did at home to go along with a vacation video I shot. We had rented a large sailboat for the day and it was magical. That part of the home video wasn't very long, so neither is the song. I did this with Virtual instruments on a very modest computer with an AMD athelon Processor.
I have been constructive though. I am not a mean person, but I am honest. What is the point in us having a thread asking for critique, if we don't give, erm, critique?
Well one of three things applies to you my friend,
1. You haven't read or just skimmed over the protocol set forth in the first post where the criteria was established for these critiques pertaining to this track.
2. You understood the criteria and lack the vision and imagination necessary to see through a performance to actually judge the writing of a given track.
3. You're pretending to be foolish and neither 1 or 2 apply to you, you understand the criteria and wish to have a platform to exercise your mean and nasty demeanor, judging by your use of grammar and ability to express ideas and complete sentences I'm guessing this is you, shame on you!
Huge props to the Gearslutz Gods for providing this forum!
This is a thread to post rough demos of songs, for critique NOT of production but of composition. So out-of-tune vocals or crappy recordings are totally fine -- this is about the song, not the performance.
Here's a song I just finished but am still noodling on. What I like about it so far is the chordal structure, the way the chorus kicks in, and the way it keeps on modulating. Not sure about the lyrics yet.
I love the idea of the song musically and the premise of the lyric I think you would do well to polish it production wise of course but lyrically I would like to see a better a pay off at the end of the chorus on why you should, "Hold on to love" as opposed to it being a better day maybe going the direction more literally of how it would benefit you, as opposed to arbitrarily it's going to be a better day, why is it going to be a better day? Other than that I love the chord structure and melody, yes I can hear the intended melody unlike other folks, although I would be wrong if I condoned the vocal performance you know this already. Great song, everything I love about the Beatles singer/songwriter thing!
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