Originally Posted by coyotekells
Here's one of my own songs, as well as a client's (both tracked and mixed by me)
Crazy World is rap with an Akon-esque hook, Right Back is..ahh.. urban pop? The latter wouldn't attach, too big, so there's a direct MP3 download link.
I'm especially curious what deficiencies hit you ears first.. I am aware of some, but curious what bothers other folks. What you like about either mix is nice to hear to of course. http://www.stkelly.com/promodl/st_kelly-right_back.php
Not sure If you want to hear from a "noobie" but here's what I hear:
1) "Crazy world" is a pretty nice track...my wifey even asked "is that TPain or Akon or one of those guys?" Lol!
2) I longed to have a lil' more something on "Right Back"...a lil' more production or backing vox! It throws serious jabs but it needed that sudden right hook, uppercut or something to throw a shift in there somewhere! Dre could have very well produced this track but of course Dre would throw in some (more) horn blasts early on or a tambourine rattle or a zoom shift somewhere u'feel? The backing vox seem a little tamed and held back volume wise...I'm expecting that at the second chorus things will get louder and so on but never get it! Very laid back track tho with nice musicality and this is a really good vibe...very RandB-esque (remember that dude? He was good!). Oh yeah and on that "aye" part in the end I thought was gonna be the cookie cutter 8-16 bar spit (rap)! To my surprize and a bit of dismay it wasn't! The status quo rap w/i a given song (name your genre) often has become so mundane and redundant! Yet, if there was ever a place to have someone spit the hotness it was at that point...like I said it builds up nicely to it with the style and feel of this song! Didn't have to have the puffy, BIG or Jay "yeah...uh huh...uh huh..." preface before the spit just that "AYE" would start the spit!
Very solid on both cuts bruh!