Could you please upload something with a little bit better quality than posting a youtube video? Would be very hard to comment on a lot of the certain sounds.
You have a very commercial poppy sound. Take that as you will, but people writing music like this tend to make the most money, so hopefully it goes well for you. I don't love the track, but I don't like anything that sounds like this either, so my review is kind of useless..I do have to say compared to anything else I've heard thats similar, you definitely nailed it. Sounds just like what I think you were trying to accomplish!
Also, you could consider to make a longer outro & intro. Might be more beneficial to more people that way, just an idea.