do you think this chorus is hot ???

[rapandclap]

hi guys
just wondering what you thought about this chorus ( the mix is totally not done yet but you can clearly judge whether this is good or bad ).
let me know your thoughts ? thanks !!!!

http://soundcloud.com/waltzjeremy/gasolina-chorus111

[teknatronik]

It doesnt sound like the vocals go to the beat.

[rapandclap]

Originally Posted by teknatronik

It doesnt sound like the vocals go to the beat.

i don't get what you're trying to say ?

[KnewJack]

It's not awful, but not good either. Is English a second language for the vocalist? They need to clear up what they are saying. Lyrics a are a bit weak too. Melody is ok though.

[rapandclap]

Originally Posted by KnewJack

It's not awful, but not good either. Is English a second language for the vocalist? They need to clear up what they are saying. Lyrics a are a bit weak too. Melody is ok though.

yes english is a second language but his vocal is performed in a very cheap microphone and not mixed yet . he's singing :

you gonna love it
when i tie your body up
scream for mercy
there's gasolina in that cup
burn it down now
with your camel cigarette
it's a desert
fire flames around your bed

do you have any advice on which words he has to pronounce better ( if there are any of course ) ?

[teknatronik]

Originally Posted by rapandclap

i don't get what you're trying to say ?

maybe its diff reverbs or maybe diff eq, but the vocal doesnt sit with the beat.

[rapandclap]

Originally Posted by teknatronik

maybe its diff reverbs or maybe diff eq, but the vocal doesnt sit with the beat.

ow yes i know the vocal is performed in a 30 dollar microphone and totally not mixed. it's just pure on melody that i'm asking if you think this is hot or not?

[Jonny_silva]

Personally I dont think its hot for a hook no. It would be ok for a pre hook, just seems a bit generic and gay 80s disco for me. Sorry.

[rapandclap]

Originally Posted by Jonny_silva

Personally I dont think its hot for a hook no. It would be ok for a pre hook, just seems a bit generic and gay 80s disco for me. Sorry.

ok interesting point of view. i don't want it to sound gay 80's disco. is there anything i could change except for the lyrics to not make it sound that way . keep in mind this is not mixed off yet so it's gonna be more vocals . right now my vocal is solo with no backings on it but just a reverb and i think that's the main reason why it reminds you of 80's disco.

[Jonny_silva]

Its just the way hes singing it and the beat, gives me a picture of him stood behind the mic singing that flapping his arms around in a camp way lol.

But hey it will probably sound completely different when your finished so why not put it up again then so we can compare. And I am only 1 person with an opinion, if you and him like it then just go with it.

[NWSooner]

How many times do we need this thread Koko?

There was this one:

Gasolina : electro or not ?

And then there was this one:

Do you think this voice has the potential to be on an electronic song ?

And there was this one:

Do you guys think this is a good chorus for an electro song ?

Fourth time's the charm?

(Oh, and to answer the original question... no.)

[artech909]

haha gotcha! anyway this chorus is cold as ice)) ICE ICE BABY

[msl]

Here we go again. Sounds like 2 Unlimited with a weak vocal/lyric. If only it was 80's disco instead...

Originally Posted by rapandclap

yes english is a second language but MY vocal is performed in a very cheap microphone and not mixed yet . I AM singing :

...do you have any advice on which words I NEED to pronounce better ( if there are any of course ) ?

Corrected.

[Simonator]

Originally Posted by NWSooner

How many times do we need this thread Koko?

There was this one:

Gasolina : electro or not ?

And then there was this one:

Do you think this voice has the potential to be on an electronic song ?

And there was this one:

Do you guys think this is a good chorus for an electro song ?

Fourth time's the charm?

(Oh, and to answer the original question... no.)

[Simonator]

It sounds like someone who just discovered Fruityloops tried to mix this:





with this:

Originally Posted by rapandclap

i don't want it to sound gay 80's disco. is there anything i could change

Personally, I'd re-write all the music & lyrics, get different vocalists, different synths, different drum samples and a different producer.

Potentially, you could keep the 1/16th note delay that you have on the hi-hat (although turn the wet signal WAY down), but I think you should trash the rest.

[razorblade]

Personally, I'd re-write all the music & lyrics, get different vocalists, different synths, different drum samples and a different producer.

Potentially, you could keep the 1/16th note delay that you have on the hi-hat (although turn the wet signal WAY down), but I think you should trash the rest.

[mike vee]

80s disco is awesome. This is not. And it sounds like some weird rave music anyway not disco.

[Foxis]

Sorry, no.
And while I truly appreciate someone trying to improve on their art and seeking input, I am not sure this is the right place or the way to do it. This (like the other posts) more smell of attention seeking.

[moox]

You really are a sucker for punishment.

[dhollmusik]

Originally Posted by Jonny_silva

seems a bit generic and gay 80s disco for me.

Koko The Klown still insists on spamming us...if the mods keep insisting on dumping established member's threads in the "post yer music" sticky then this should also follow.

[WhiteSheets]

This music is absolutely appalling - there's some brutal honesty. I'm still unsure whether you're trolling, Rapandclap. If you are, I'd have to say you're pretty damn good at it.

[The Dark Matters]

Sorry RapandCrap I have to agree with the others thats the singing is off tempo and very dated and appalling!!! Goodluck though!

[Tarkovsky]

What you need is one of these.

https://www.beatthang.com/products/beat-thang.html

[boon]

so hot.. like hansel.

[rapandclap]

ok thanks for the advice

[skanker]

I'd Have to agree with the others on the quality of the production but i can hear what your trying to do so don't be put off.

you say you only just started making music and thats obviously true but bare in mind that everybody who makes music was at this stage at some point.
if you have self belief and an appetite for hard work im sure it will all come together in the end.

Good luck!

[rapandclap]

Originally Posted by skanker

I'd Have to agree with the others on the quality of the production but i can hear what your trying to do so don't be put off.

you say you only just started making music and thats obviously true but bare in mind that everybody who makes music was at this stage at some point.
if you have self belief and an appetite for hard work im sure it will all come together in the end.

Good luck!

yea but the quality sucks i know it's done through a mic of 30 dollars but the chorus and background vocals aren't . my vocals are just poorly mixed but all i wanted to know was whether if this would be a hot melody for a chorus or not. all people did what criticize me so i guess i just should thank them for that...thanks anyway for your honesty

[celerysux]

It sounds like it can be an album filler for a B list celebrity. I personally think it sounds a little cheesy ,but it shows you do have music theory knowledge and have the potential to make something better.

[Simonator]

Originally Posted by rapandclap

......but all i wanted to know was whether if this would be a hot melody for a chorus or not. all people did what criticize me so i guess i just should thank them for that...thanks

You are welcome.


But perhaps you should start a fifth thread, asking the same thing for the fifth time... just to be certain.

[Dirty Halo]

Originally Posted by NWSooner

How many times do we need this thread Koko?

There was this one:

Gasolina : electro or not ?

And then there was this one:

Do you think this voice has the potential to be on an electronic song ?

And there was this one:

Do you guys think this is a good chorus for an electro song ?

Fourth time's the charm?

(Oh, and to answer the original question... no.)

Thanks for that post, I was reading the lyrics thinking; have I seen this before or is it just so generic that it seems that way?

To the OP, you're abusing the goodwill of the forum at this point. I recommend chilling out on this topic.

-a