| Hi John,
From your example I thought it needed more optical film audio pops and clicks. They are quite different to tape hiss or vinyl crackle and are used on the Harry Enfield track. You might want to add the odd sharper click on a visual edit here and there if you are trying to copy it precisely.
However, for a feature length film I'm not sure you would want to listen to the same level of audio noise consistently, unless you are determined to make it 'period'. I would be aware that the technology of the Harry Enfield clip is more like 1930-1940s pre 1950's - 1960's when your thing is set.
Hope this helps, I thought your 'after' clip sounded pretty good too.
Rob |