[uncle duncan]

Nice tune. It has a certain unsettling, creepy quality that I really like. I could imagine it in a David Lynch movie.

Have you considered working on your vocals? As in doing scales every day? Just like any instrument, if you don't practice, you'll never get better. I say this from personal experience. If I sing scales along with the piano every morning for a week, suddenly, I can sing in tune. If I don't, my pitch control goes away and when I record my singing I have to fix everything with pitch correction later. It's great to be a character-singer, scooping up or down to notes, but at some point you need to nail the pitch. Especially in the group vocal that finishes the song.

Since this piece is a relatively steady tempo, it's a perfect candidate for a grid and a loop. Many loops are actually played by real drummers. To assume you can come up with something better than a real drummer is not realistic. In today's music market, rhythm is king. Your home made rhythm, at least on this track, won't cut it. In fact, it will telegraph 'amateur' to anyone who listens to it.

I really like your instrumentation. Perhaps during the repetitive group vocal section at the end, you could come up with a counter-melody to play in the background, like a far away clarinet or something. Listen to some of the Beatles stuff for ideas. The great thing about their music is the simplicity of it, even though it can sound quite complicated. If you actually break it down, you'll find defined parts, counter-melodies, that combine to create a huge sound.

With this in mind, I think you could do more with the stereo field.

Your song has the potential to be a really great track. Nice work!